2014考研英語小作文經(jīng)典范文：投訴信（二）_跨考網(wǎng)

　　0-4分》》考研英語復習指導

　　第一篇：

　　Dear manager,

　　I am Li Ming.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy in your shop in february.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is it has been bad before its useful-life. In the first place, it smells horrible now, just in october. In addition, it has been totally bad. I did not dare to use it anymore. Under this circustances, I find it terrible to your work and upset me.

　　I appreciate it very much if you could refund me, preferably, as soon as possible,and I would like to have this matter setteled by three days.

　　Thank you for consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming.

　　Dear manager,

　　I am Li Ming.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy(改為bought) in your shop in february(拼寫錯誤，改為February).

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is it has been bad before its useful-life(不能理解你的意思). In the first place, it smells horrible now, just in october(這是中式英語，應刪除，此外月份要大寫). In addition, it has been totally bad. I did not dare to use it anymore. Under this(改為these) circustances(拼寫錯誤，改為circumstances), I find it terrible to your work and upset me.(用法錯誤，這個句型是I find it +adj+that/to do sth.)

　　I appreciate it very much if you could refund me(加the money), preferably, as soon as possible (preferably 后面加進一步的要求，加動詞原型),and I would like to have this matter setteled (拼寫錯誤，改為settled)by(后面是具體的時間，此處應改為in) three days.

　　Thank you for (加your)consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming.

　　2分

　　同學你好，標點符號與后面的單詞空一格。語法錯誤比較多，建議你多背一些好的句型，此外，再細心一點，盡量避免出現(xiàn)單詞拼寫錯誤。

　　第二篇

　　Dear Sales Manager,

　　I am a senior in the Computer Science Department of Fudan University. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about this book Practical Writing for NETEM bought in your bookstore last week.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is to exert amount of the obvious faults in this book. In the fist place, the explanation and analysis about the portion of reading comprehension is shown as uncertain to cause easily some mistakes in my mind. In addition, owing to not follow the standard form in print, the words and sentences can not be clearly identified. Under these circumstances, I find it worse to waste my valuable time and energy

　　I appreciate it very much if you could be returned this book, preferably refund me the money, and I would like to have this matter settled within seven days.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　Dear Sales Manager,

　　I am a senior in the Computer Science Department of Fudan University. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about this book Practical Writing for NETEM bought in your bookstore last week.

　　The reason for my dissatisfaction is to exert(改為 there are a)amount of the (刪除)obvious faults in this book. In the fist(拼寫錯誤，改為 first) place, the explanation and analysis about the portion of(刪除 the portion of ) reading comprehension is shown as uncertain to cause easily some mistakes in my mind(不能理解你要表達的意思). In addition, owing to not follow the standard form in print, the words and sentences can not be clearly identified. Under these circumstances, I find it worse to waste my valuable time and energy(這句話沒寫完，后面還要加上to do …).

　　I appreciate it very much if you could be(刪除be) returned(用詞不當，此外，此處應該用動詞原形) this book, preferably refund me the money, and I would like to have this matter settled within seven days.

　　Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　3分

　　同學你好，請注意提高英語的表達能力，你的作文中存在表述不清的句子，這在作文中是很嚴重的問題。建議你多背一些滿分作文，積累一些好的句型。