2014考研英語寫作160篇:論時(shí)間(考生作文批改及評(píng)分)_跨考網(wǎng)
寫作原文
?、貯s is vividly betrayed in the cartoon, a juvenile, with great efforts, is pushing a clock hand fordward(拼寫錯(cuò)誤,改為forward), becase(拼寫錯(cuò)誤,改為because) he is curious about his futre, (拼寫錯(cuò)誤,改為future;逗號(hào)改為句號(hào)) an(改為An) old man, however, is doing his utmost to push the clock hand backward, because he wants to retrospect his old days. ②Apparantly(拼寫錯(cuò)誤,改為Apparently), what they do is ultimately futile.①Simple as the picture is, its symbolic meaning subtly conveyed(前面加which,構(gòu)成定語從句,修飾symbolic meaning;conveyed時(shí)態(tài)使用錯(cuò)誤。因此,可改為which subtly conveys) is profound and thought-provoking. ②There is little dispute that time is a sovereign gift for all peple(拼寫錯(cuò)誤,改為people) and no one is expected to manipulate or speed up it (speed up為動(dòng)副結(jié)構(gòu),修飾代詞時(shí),代詞放中間;可改為speed it up). ③So, attempting a life (加is,構(gòu)成be filled with)filled with no regrets, one should employ his time well, otherwise, a humilating(拼寫錯(cuò)誤,改為humiliating) future will be not far away from us. ④In addition, the old saying:"Time and tide wait for no man" also highlights the magnitude of cherishing time. ⑤Therefore, what we are supposed to do everyday is to make use of every chance to do useful things.①As far as I'm concerned, time invariably treats everyone equally. ②One can become informed and wise by treasuring time. ③Mo Yan, for example, who cherishes every minutes(every+名詞單數(shù),將minutes改為minute) to think and contemplate (句子缺成分,加“, and he”)has achieved great success in his works. ④Hence let's keep the aphorism in mind forever, that is:"A young idler , (標(biāo)點(diǎn)使用有誤,英語中,每個(gè)標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)后面應(yīng)該空一個(gè)字符,然后再繼續(xù)書寫單詞)an old beggar".
原作點(diǎn)評(píng):
第一段描述圖畫的內(nèi)容,應(yīng)注意拼寫問題。第二段揭示圖畫的寓意,深入探討珍惜時(shí)間的重要性;第①句注意時(shí)態(tài)的正確使用;第②句注意單詞拼寫及動(dòng)副結(jié)構(gòu)的使用。第三段通過舉名人的例子及格言“少壯不努力,老大徒傷悲”,點(diǎn)明文章主題??傮w點(diǎn)評(píng)文章亮點(diǎn):文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整,每個(gè)段落的功能基本得以體現(xiàn)。文章錯(cuò)誤:①語法錯(cuò)誤:文章出現(xiàn)了少量的語法錯(cuò)誤,比如時(shí)態(tài)一致性問題;every+名詞單數(shù)等。②拼寫問題:?jiǎn)卧~拼寫錯(cuò)誤情況較為嚴(yán)重,望細(xì)心改正。
修改意見:
文章整體構(gòu)思、用詞還不錯(cuò),但是單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤較多。希望作者在以后的寫作中,避免這一問題的發(fā)生。同時(shí)要注意在復(fù)習(xí)過程中,留意一些基本的語法點(diǎn),減少作文中的錯(cuò)誤??梢越Y(jié)合英語寫作范文,積累更多的詞匯和句子,為作文添彩。加油,祝你考研成功!!
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